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Band 5

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in forign countries. Discouse the advantages and disadvantages of this:

Nowadays,
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Magority
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Majority
 of
students
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 prefer to go
oversea
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overseas
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 in order to continue their
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study
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studies
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.
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, there are some advantages
such
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 as social
network
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 development and
study
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 in
top ranked
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universities
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, Spending a lot of cost and homesickness can be considered drawbacks and both sides will
explore
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be explored
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this
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 essay. One of the major advantages of studying abroad is social
network
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 development. During studying
at
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in
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 a foreign country,
students
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 can build a new strong
network
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 with their professors and classmates resulting find a suitable job position or establishing personal business easier in the future.
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, one of my friends is working in the company that his professor introduced him to there. The second significant advantage is experiencing
study
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 in the top-ranked
universities
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.
According to
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 the QS
universities
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 ranking, the best
universities
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 in the world usually are located in the USA and Western Europe which means many
students
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 in other areas should emigrate to these
countries
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 if they want to
study
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 in the top level
universities
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.
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, another one of my friends applied for a PhD program in a university with a 100 global rank and now he is studying there.
On the other hand
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, studying abroad
costs
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 a lot. Home rent, transportation
costs
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 and, university tuition are some of
routine
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the routine
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 living
costs
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 that
students
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 should consider before migration. Especially, since advanced
countries
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 have stronger currency than other
countries
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,
students
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 may be forced to spend more money than their
countries
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. As an example, the average living
costs
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 in London are 1500 dollars per month
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this
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 is 500 dollars in my country, Iran.
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, homesickness is another significant drawback. Not only do the
students
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 who emigrate miss their
family
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families
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 but
also
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 because of the long distance, they miss everything that they had in their
countries
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.
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, immigrant
students
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 usually video call their family every day,
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 when they were in their country, it was possible that they wouldn’t be in touch with their family for a week. In conclusion, many
students
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 try to
study
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 at foreign
universities
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.
This
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 decision is a double-edged sword that has some advantages and disadvantages at the same time. It includes some positive points
such
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network
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build up
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 and experiencing
study
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 in the top level
universities
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.
However
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, there are some disadvantages
such
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 as homesickness and spending money a lot.

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structure
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay. This could help guide the reader more effectively.
coherence
Add clearer transitions between paragraphs and within them to improve the flow of ideas. For example, use phrases like 'furthermore', 'in addition', or 'on the contrary' to show relationships between points.
language
Make sure to refine sentence structure and grammar. For instance, correct 'Magority' to 'Majority' and adjust clauses to be more coherent. Minor grammatical inaccuracies can affect clarity.
examples
Expand on your examples with more specificity or detail to make them even more relevant to your arguments. Providing context can strengthen the electric power of examples.
content
You clearly identified both advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, demonstrating a balanced view of the topic.
examples
You provided personal examples which added a relatable touch and made your arguments more compelling.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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