In many countries, people like to eat a lot of food that cannot be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food that people consume from other countries. Do the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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the climate, solid and so forth, it may be a wise approach to agree that it is impossible to expect foods that can be grown in one
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. Having said that, it is a common thing that people may want to eat foods that can not be grown in their hometown
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accesibility
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accessibility
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is quite simple as export of
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products
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is common and easily made by countries. In
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or not. Food has a vital importance not
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it for
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often may have a good psychological impact. Eating
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is always a pleasure and it is
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universal practice; people may often spend
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amount of money to gain a
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cuisine experience. Citizens can easily want to consume different
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grown in their hometown.
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my hometown, I
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, considering the economy of a
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, exporting
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a negative impact. In order to
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the economy, the number of
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shall be
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than
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. Especially for
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countries like Turkey, in which various types of fruits and vegetables can be found,
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the local
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in order to reduce exported
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, I often find the exported
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fruits, are not taste well,
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I ate them in their origin
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, I opine that as a consumer,
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of consuming food from
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other countries
outweight
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outweigh
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from a government's perspective,
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the opposite.

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Consider revising the introduction to provide a clearer thesis statement that specifically outlines your position on the advantages and disadvantages.
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Work on connecting your ideas more effectively by using linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your essay.
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Provide more specific examples to support your main points. This will add depth to your arguments.
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You have clearly articulated both advantages and disadvantages of consuming food from other countries, which demonstrates an awareness of the topic.
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Your use of personal experience adds a relatable touch to your argument about the enjoyment of food, making your essay engaging.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diverse diet
  • cultural exchange
  • trade relations
  • food security
  • supply chain disruptions
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental issues
  • local economies
  • nutritional value
  • importation
  • imported products
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