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The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides key information about the total figure of time used by telephone calls in Australia with different categories (Local-National & international - Mobiles),applied from 2001 - 2008. The units are measured in billions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the Local
minutes
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has
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have
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 the highest digit in
the
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apply
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all years.
In addition
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, they reached the peak in 2005 which was 90 billion
minutes
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,
Whereas
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 the sum of
minutes
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 used by Mobiles has the lowest values in the same period .
Moreover
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, the total digit of
minutes
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 used
the
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by the
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 Mobiles reached only 2 billion
minutes
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 in 2001.
According to
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 what is shown, the number of
minutes
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 utilized by National & international has the intermediate range in all eight years,
As well as
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 they reached the maximum apply in 2008 .
To sum up
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, we could say that the total number of
minutes
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 applied in the three categories
were
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apply
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gradually increased
started
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starting
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 from 2001 till 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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