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Band 7.5

You recently spent a weekend with your friend in her/his new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: •explain what you like about his new house •describe what you enjoyed most about your stay •suggest when and where you could meet next

Dear Sara, I hope you’re well. I just wanted to write a few words to thank you for
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 weekend. First of all, I want to mention how much I liked your new house, which isn’t only spacious, well designed and carefully decorated, but
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 has perfect daylight lighting, which suits you well, as you’re the one with green fingers, you can dedicate a room to grow plants and flowers as you always wished.
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 I’m not much of an early bird, I was keen on waking up early by the sunlight and I
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 found the beautiful sound of hummingbirds singing, fascinating.
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, I really enjoyed our morning walks, which was a refreshing experience, doing a brisk activity early in the morning and buying delicious coffee right after, sounds like a great start for one’s daily routine. Now that our neighbourhoods are in close proximity to each other, why don’t we hang out more often? I suggest that you spend next weekend at my place. I’m looking forward to catching up with you again. Best regards, Anita

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific details about the house, such as specific rooms or features you found particularly appealing.
coherence and cohesion
To enhance clarity, ensure each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that summarizes the main idea of that paragraph.
tone
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is very suitable for the context of writing to a friend.
content
You effectively described what you liked about the house and your enjoyable experiences, making the letter engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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