Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other school subjects and therefore should be give more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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essential than other
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subject for students to choose more than required
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future
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. Even
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should know essential basic
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as math, language, science and social.
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, schools should balance the schedule or give freedom for
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students will have only critical and
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understand how to adapt their mindset
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task achievement
You present a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence
Your use of transitional phrases shows effort to enhance coherence between sentences.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • cultural awareness
  • emotional well-being
  • social skills
  • globalized world
  • balanced curriculum
  • STEM skills
  • foundational
  • career paths
  • problem-solving
  • diverse backgrounds
  • mental health
  • economic trends
  • participation
  • creative outlet
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