A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like

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Dear Sahil, I am writing
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letter to suggest you a place to visit for your upcoming vacation. The name of the place is Banff. I visited
this
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place
last
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summers
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summer
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with my family and still didn't forget the amazing
experienced
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experience
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we had over there. On our way heading towards the destination, the drive was so fabulous because of
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the tremondous
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tremondous
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tremendous
views. It is an hour and
half
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a half
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drive from Calgary. Since I love to travel in
mountains
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the mountains
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,
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was my trip as compared to other ones. We stayed at
five
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a
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star
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five-star
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property named
as
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Canmore
suites
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. The rooms were pretty big and the reception was
quiet
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quite
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familiar as well.
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, during the morning
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we enjoyed swimming in the pool which has slides connected to it.
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, several visiting places
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as cafes,
gandola
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gondola
rides etc are
on
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walking distance.
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, we didn't
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a chance to see
moraine lake
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Moraine Lake
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and
lake louise
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Lake Louise
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because of
shortage
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a shortage
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of time. You can experience these as well since they are not far from the stay.
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, the hotel serves very delicious food , so, you don't need to go outside to eat. I am looking forward to hearing from you and hope that you will visit Banff and afterwards share your experience with me. Yours lovingly, Raghav Sharma.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to refine your paragraph structure to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea clearly and logically. For instance, separate your thoughts about accommodation and activities for better clarity.
task achievement
You made a good connection with your friend by sharing personal experiences. Consider adding a bit more detail about the locations you mentioned (Moraine Lake and Lake Louise) to enhance your recommendation.
task achievement
You established a friendly tone throughout your letter, which is very engaging and appropriate for the context.
coherence and cohesion
You included specific details about your experience, such as the drive and hotel, which adds to the vividness of your recommendation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • picturesque
  • breathtaking
  • culturally rich
  • accommodations
  • amenities
  • local cuisine
  • adventure sports
  • historical sites
  • memorable experience
  • quaint
  • authentic
  • scenic views
  • hospitality
  • serenity
  • bustling markets
  • authentic dining experience
  • pristine
  • local delicacies
  • vibrant
  • tranquil
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