A freiend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. the letter, - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Anna, I hope you are doing splendidly! It has been a long time since we caught each other. I'm thinking that we will go on a camp holiday in our summer vacation. It

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gives us some time to refresh ourselves from our hectic work schedule. I think you really enjoy it because we never tried any

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activity in our whole life. Despite the above-mentioned excitement, there are several drawbacks

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camping in a forest.

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, we are going with some strangers. We have to make a connection with them by talking to them because they have a lot of experience in it.

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, there are some wild animals as well, so we have to stay strong and safe.

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safety reasons, we have to share our tent with other people.

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I love to do

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things and you

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types of holidays.

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we are busy with our work, through

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, we meet each other and spend quality time. I hope you'll join me

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vacation. Best wishes, Manjinder Kaur

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coherence and cohesion

Try to improve the clarity of your ideas and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single concept or theme. This will help improve coherence.

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Consider including a clearer expression of your feelings about camping, perhaps sharing a personal story or memory related to it.

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Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for the context.

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You have effectively included both the positive and negative aspects of camping, which provides a balanced view for your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

194 words

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