The graph shows information about the number of people in Australian who use Chinese, Arabic, Italian, and Greek as their first language.

The graph shows information about the number of people in Australian who use Chinese, Arabic, Italian, and Greek as their first language.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows information about the number of people in Australian who use Chinese, Arabic, Italian, and Greek as their first language.
The line graph illustrates how many Australian residents
speaking
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Chinese, Arabic,
Italian
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, and
Greek
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as their
first
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language
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.
Overall
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, the figures
of
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for
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Chinese and Arabic
speakers
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climbed to
vary
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degrees, with the former
witnessed
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witnessing
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a nearly
quadruple
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quadrupled
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growth,
whereas
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the
quantity
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number
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of people speaking the other two languages experienced a steady drop. It is noticeable that Chinese overtook
Greek
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from 1996 onwards, and
become
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became
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the most commonly spoken
first
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language
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out of the four. Looking
first
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at
Chines
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Chinese
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and Arabic,
albert
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Albert
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beginning with the third place, with north of 100000
speakers
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in 1986.
This
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figure surpassed
Italian
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and
Greek
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in 1996 and continued to jump considerably, reaching 350000
at the end
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of the timescale, A
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similarly
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pattern,
albert
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albeit
Albert
less pronounced was observed in the latter. The initial figure was only the lowest in
graph
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the graph
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at 50000
speakers
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, but after a quarter of a century, the
quantity
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number
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of Arabic
speakers
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tripled to 150000
speakers
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, securing
thid
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third
this
place by the end of the period. Turning to
Greek
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and
Italian
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, the former
initially
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was the commonly spoken
first
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language
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, with about 230000
speakers
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in 1986. Thence, the number of
Greek
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speakers
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fell marginal to just under 200000 by 2011, which
becomes
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became
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the second most spoken
language
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. The latter
similarly
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drop from 150000 to approximately 100000 over the
25 year
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25-year
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span.
At the end
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of the period,
Italian
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was the least preferred
language
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, similarly".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words italian, greek, first, language, speakers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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