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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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derived
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 from the above table which enumerates the
sales
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 of a coffee shop on a normal day during 13 working hours. As an initial overview, it is
noticable
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noticeable
 that coffee is the most favourable item in the shop, as its
sales
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 are above 100 during the whole day. Notably, pastries are the most popular order in
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the mornings
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mornings
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 hours which reached 275;
however
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, sandwiches are the least by only 50.
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,
this
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 shop's
costumers
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customers
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 prefer drinking tea between 7.30 and 10.30, as the table shows that its
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 reached
to
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110 in
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 period in comparison to other periods that its
sales
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 did not exceed 75.
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, both tea and pastries
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 plummeted during the period from 10.30 and 2.30, as it became less than
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half.
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, sandwiches'
sales
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 rocketed to 4 times and became 200.
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, all the items
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 decreased in the next period except pastries which increased by 55.
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, at the night
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 people tended to pay for a coffee
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 tea.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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