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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the habits of
people
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 in four countries who used their money for several consumer goods categories in 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Britain
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 dominated in all sectors, with more than one hundred fifty
thousand
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pounds
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 sterling spent in each sector. Belgians paid the highest amount for goods for outdoor game accessories, exactly 150
thousand
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pounds
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,
while
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 in Spain, they used it for toys, more than 150
thousand
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pounds
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.
Britain
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 mostly paid for cameras, the same as Austria, even though
Britain
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 used more than Austria. In Belgium, books became the sector with the lowest spending in terms of money spent.
People
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 paid below 145
thousand
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pounds
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 for books. Meanwhile, in Spain,
people
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 rarely used it for console games. It
also
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 happened in
Britain
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,
although
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 they spent a bit more than Spain. In Austria, outdoor game accessories were the opposite of those of the Belgians.
People
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 only used 140
thousand
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pounds
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 for
this
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 sector.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, britain, thousand, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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