You believe that your local library needs some improvements. Write a letter to the library manager to suggest changes.In your letter: • explain why you think the library needs improvements, • suggest what changes should be made, • invite the manager to discuss your suggestions in more detail

Dear manager I am writing
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suggestion letter that some improvements need about my local
library
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Firstly
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our local
library
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has too many types of furniture interesting books or magazines for adults and old people . Books are very profitable and beneficial who come to our
library
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. I think
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learn more information
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literature there is a fit condenser and shelf for a book .
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, I would have more chances in the
library
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. They will paint
colour
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on walls which do not focus on the students.
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, the furniture must be comfortable for everyone. I record that, I meet the cafe to you where near to your work office.
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, we will meet in a cafe at 9:00 a.m. on Monday if you have time to discuss my advice in more detail. I look forward to your prompt response Best regards Feruza

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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly into separate paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally focus on one main idea, and transitions between ideas can improve clarity.
task achievement
Use more specific language when suggesting improvements to make your points stronger. For example, clarify what types of furniture and colors would enhance the library experience.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite tone and clearly invites further discussion, which is a positive aspect of your approach.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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