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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reason for this? How can people research this?

In
this
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 day and age, a large percentage of
people
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 want to learn about the
history
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 of the places that they live,
such
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 as houses, departments and buildings. There are a
lot
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 of reasons
about
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for
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this
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 but, recently,
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internet
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the internet
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 and television shows have been discussing
about
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the importance of
this
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 topic.
Besides
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, the number of fake news about
this
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 theme is increasing so we need to check our
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 and,
for
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this
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 reason, the
internet
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 and old
people
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is
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are
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 important to us.
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, in the
last
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 ten
years
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years,
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 a
lot
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 of different television programmes have been talking
and
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about and
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 showing the importance of knowing the value of
the
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old things like watches, books, furniture, carpets and even houses.
This
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 increasing interest in
this
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 kind of
things
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thing
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 could be one of the reasons
which
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why
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people
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who
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apply
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want to find
about
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out about
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 the
history
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 of the
house
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 or building they live in. Eventually,
this
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 could have a great cultural impact if
people
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 found something,
for instance
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, in Talca city workers found undergrown tunnels in the city
while
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 they were digging in the garden of a
house
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. Obviously, situations like
this
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 make
in
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us
to
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want to learn more about our constructions and cities.
On the other hand
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, we can search
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information
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for information
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in
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on
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 the
internet
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 and the AI. Those are good tools to
learn
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learning
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 about our cities and neighbourhoods,
also
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, with the help of
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the internet
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internet
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 we can know if
it
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something is true or false.
For example
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, years ago a
lot
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 of
Chileans
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 kid believed that their schools were
building
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built
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 in old graveyards and, without the
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 help, they
cannot
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could not
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researched
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research
be researched
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about
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apply
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this
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information
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.
In contrast
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, with
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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 we can make a fast check about our places and constructions.
In addition
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,
other
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another
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 way to have
information
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 about the
history
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 of the
house
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 or building could be
talk
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to talk
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 with an old neighbour because
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this
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these
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people
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 know a
lot
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 of different histories of the past. In conclusion, if someone is interested in the
history
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 of their
house
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 they need to be careful about the
information
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 because, maybe, that could be
a fake news
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fake news
a piece of fake news
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 and the best way to learn about the
history
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 of some place is
talking
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by talking
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 with old
people
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 because they have a
lot
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 of knowledge.

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task response
Make sure to clarify the thesis statement in the introduction to guide the reader on what to expect in the body paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs, helping to improve overall cohesion.
task response
The essay presents relevant points about the reasons for increased interest in historical research and offers methods for how to conduct this research, which is a strong aspect of task achievement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • archival records
  • historical significance
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • cultural heritage
  • ancestry
  • architectural features
  • heritage conservation
  • property deeds
  • local history books
  • genealogy
  • census records
  • historical societies
  • land registry
  • oral histories
  • blueprints
  • renovation
  • tax incentives
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