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The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information with data about the production of
oil
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 every day in four different countries over a period of four years.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen from the table that
oil
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 production witnessed an upward trend in the period shown.
Additionally
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, Congo gas largest percentage of
oil
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 in
majority
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the majority
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 of the decade,
while
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 Chad was the lowest in the table.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, in 2000 Congo
has
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had
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 the highest amount of
oil
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 production, which accounted for 275,000 ,
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however
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this
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 proportion went down by
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further
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 27% in 2004. Followed by , the
every day
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oil
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 in Nigeria ,
initially
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 was 205,000 and in two years
next,
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this
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 figure declined to 190,000 ,
nonetheless
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 increasing once again to a peak at 213,000
in
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at
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 the end of 2004.
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, there
was
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 solely 5,000 products of
oil
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 in Somalia in 2000, and
in
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four years later,
this
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 ratio increased to 50,000 .
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 , between 2000 and 2002 , there
is
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 no registered
of
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oil
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 in Chad ,
this
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 country experienced rapid growth to 8,000 in 2003 and
remain
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continued
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 increasing to 50.000 in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production levels
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable
  • Peak production
  • Output
  • Significant changes
  • Yearly comparison
  • Global production
  • Correlations
  • Patterns
  • Volume of production
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