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The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps
presents
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present
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 a
town
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center
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centre
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 in 1990 and the same
town
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center
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centre
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 in the current
time
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 ,
i
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I
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 will write about what
happend
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happened
 in
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town
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the town
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center
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centre
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 during that
time
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 in
this
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 task,
due to
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 the given data.
According to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 clear from the maps there are some facilities are still the same ,
such
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 as
park
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the park
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and
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apply
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library and
town
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 hall.
However
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, there are
aslo
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also
 some changing
happend
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happened
 in some of
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town
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the town
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center
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centre
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building
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buildings
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,
such
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 as newsagents and grocers and bakers and butchers, they are all
have
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apply
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been replaced by new shopping
mall
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malls
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, the childcare
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center
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centre
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remain
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remains
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 the same, there are
also
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 been
a changes
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a change
changes
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 in houses
they
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they have
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 been replaced to apartments block,and the walking area has been
place
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placing
placed
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 do a car path. In conclusion, from what the map gives me data
that
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apply
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, the city
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been in different changes
throw
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through
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 that
time
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of
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apply
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period from 1990 to our current
time
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, which includes 7
typs
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types
 of changes that
i
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I
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meantion
Correct your spelling
mention
mentioned
 earlier.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, center, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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