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Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries the use of alternative source of energy is encouraged . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement . It is a positive or negative development .

Most countries are inspired to replace fossil
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 with substitute resources because of the main source of energy, fossil fuels. I totally agree with
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 for two reasons which will be explained in
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 with, fossil fuels are scarce. They include coal, oil, and natural gas which formed from the remains of ancient plants and animals that lived millions of years ago. The process takes millions of years, making fossil fuel a non-renewable resource. Historically and currently, they are the primary source of energy for electricity generation, transportation, heating, and industrial processes worldwide. So, day by day, it has been exploited almost exhaustively.
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, it causes environmental pollution and affects the atmosphere. When developing fossil fuel resources, combustion
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 releases other pollutants like sulfur dioxide, nitrogen oxides, particulate matter, and volatile organic compounds , which contribute to air pollution and can harm human health and the environment.
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, extraction and transportation can lead to habitat destruction
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 mining, drilling and accidental spills, causing significant environmental damage. In summary, fossil fuels, which are the main source of resources, are boosted by alternatives by most countries. The nations in the world need
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Task Achievement
Elaborate on your arguments with more specific examples and explanations to create a deeper understanding of the issues.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your conclusion clearly states your stance and summarizes your main points for better clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your ideas by using clearer linking phrases and transitions.
Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly states your opinion, which sets a clear direction for the essay.
Task Achievement
The essay covers important aspects of fossil fuels, including their scarcity and environmental impact, demonstrating awareness of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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