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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers Do you think advantages of driverless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, the rapid advance of technology has sparked debates, arguing that humans will
be replace
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 by robots affecting various aspects of
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society. Many
people
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 believe that sooner, transportation will no longer
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 human
drivers
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due to
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 machines will be able to do
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 task by
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.
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this
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 perspective has merit and means progress, I strongly believe that
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people
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 is crucial to ensure outstanding quality and
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.
This
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 essay will discuss that modernization
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 advantages,
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however
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 my arguments
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 that individuals have essential skills to maintain their jobs.
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,
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 years modernization
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increase
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 significantly,
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and autonomous
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transportations
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transportation
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 could reduce accidents and contribute
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a
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safe traffic.
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, could reduce
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comes to
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drivers
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 who spend hours
into
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on
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 overcrowded roads.
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,
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 mechanism is attractive to companies who are interested in saving
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,
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also
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 contribute
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to
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 safety.
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, Tesla has invested millions of dollars to develop autonomous cars, which are driverless,
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to recognize hazards ahead quickly.
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,
this
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 trend of technology has increased, has benefits and become popular
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business
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businesses
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such
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 as Uber.
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, even
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 are benefits, I believe that human
drivers
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 are essential, guaranteeing quality.
People
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 study to be prepared and
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drive
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 carefully, to get
driver’s
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a driver’s
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 license
people
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 spend years
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 their lives, improving and training. As I mentioned, new systems are welcome, but have risks,
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 individuals are more reliable.
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, Porto Seguro,
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 insurance company from Brazil, offer different courses to
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 professional
drivers
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 to manage daily traffic hazards, which provide reliability for
drivers
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 and passengers.
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, training qualified professionals has outweighed
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 rather than only
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 them
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robotically
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 cars. In conclusion,
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 some argue that modernization may control services
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 as transportation,
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 individuals by machines, I am convinced that humans represent confidence and safety and is the most effective approach and
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positive
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 impact. In my opinion,
people
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 are valuable and deserve respect. Technology cannot improve skills,
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being
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 can be better over and over.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction and ensure that it directly addresses the essay prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly by maintaining a consistent structure, ideally starting with a topic sentence, followed by explanations and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and usage, particularly with verb tense and pluralization (e.g., using ‘drivers’ instead of ‘driver’s’, and ‘autonomous vehicles’ instead of ‘autonomous transportations’).
task achievement
Consider elaborating on specific examples to enhance the strength of your arguments and provide clearer insights.
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You present a clear stance on the topic and develop arguments for both sides of the issue.
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Your concluding sentence nicely summarizes your viewpoint on the value of human drivers in transportation.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility solutions
  • commute efficiency
  • occupational displacement
  • ethical quandaries
  • cybersecurity vulnerabilities
  • infrastructure overhaul
  • cultural adaptation
  • sustainability concerns
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