The map show the lay out of a university campus in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the lay out of a university campus in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map show the lay out of a university campus in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map below
present
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presents
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a
compare
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between two different
period
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periods
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in a university campus in 2010 and
current
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the current
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time.
Overall
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, as can be
seen
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seen,
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all buildings have been upgraded with additional floors and other noticeable changes in their shapes.
Moreover
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,
it is clear that
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the lake area has contracted.
To begin
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with, the teaching block has dinimished its width
built
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and built
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two additional floors.
Furthermore
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,
its
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deleted the science section and the new name became the Arts building.
In addition
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, it is noticeable that University offices applied the same alters.
Also
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, both
shop
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and restaurant replaced them with another student accommodation.
While
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the primary accommodation doubled its size with a new building beside it.
Additionally
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, the student facility has got the same changes of the accommodation without
add
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anything beside it.
Lastly
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, the lake region decreased the green cover and seat area space, they kept the water inside because it's difficult to replace or delete it.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • facilities
  • allocation
  • proximity
  • academic building
  • dormitories
  • commute
  • strategically positioned
  • research
  • study
  • physical education
  • extracurricular activities
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented
  • environment
  • social interaction
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