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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant
The given table presents the comparison between 6 countries’ metros
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 the time of the exploitation, the length and the
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 of users. As an
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 trend,
London
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 is the oldest and the longest one, but the railways in
Tokyo
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 are the most capacitive.
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Los
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Angeles
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 metro is the newest and
Kyoto
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 has the shortest route and the smallest
number
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 of visitors. The date of the opening of the underground railway system in
London
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 is 1863, which makes it the oldest, in
Paris
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 it was built in 1900 and 27 years later the building was finished in
Tokyo
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.
London
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also
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 has the biggest
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 of kilometres of route – it reaches 394,
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Paris
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 and
Tokyo
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 have a similar amount. In
Paris
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, it is 199 kilometers and in
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Tokyo
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Tokyo,
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 it is 44 kilometers shorter . When it comes to the
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 of passengers per year,
Tokyo
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 is in first place, achieving almost 1 930 000. The popularity of the metro in
Paris
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 is slightly less,
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London
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 gets 775000
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, the railway system in Washington DC started its work in 1976,
Kyoto
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 did
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 in 1981 and the metro in
Los
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Angeles
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 was opened 20 years later. Even though it was the
last
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 city that opened it, the shortest is
Kyoto
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 – its system includes 11 kilometres,
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Los
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Angeles
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 has 28 kilometres. Washington DC is the longest among these places – it reached 126 kilometers.
Kyoto
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also
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 is the least popular one, there are 45000 passengers every year,
while
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Los
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Angeles
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 has 50000 and Washington DC has 144000 million users

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, london, tokyo, los, angeles, kyoto, paris with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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