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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers Do you think advantages of driverless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages

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In the future, all types of vehicles including cars, buses and trucks may develop for driverless vehicles, as only passengers will be inside the vehicle during travelling time without
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to driver
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument before presenting my view. On the one hand, autonomous vehicles offer several clear advantages,
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 ,reduce
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, distracted and tiered
drivers
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.
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, self-drive-cars contain smart sensors which make them alert all the time.
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,improving the mobility
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 elderly people, people with disabilities and all
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humans
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,
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 development in transportation will make the traveller
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more relaxed, comfortable and without thinking about commute time.
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, there are potential drawbacks to
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major
 concern is loss of employment
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especially
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 professional
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 and personal
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 will affect their
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 to create smart traffic and fast software, which will result in increasing the cost .
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, system failures
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 issues will lead to bad road
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situations
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,
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vehicles
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but
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still they need human help
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 intervention, For
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requires staff
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routine maintenance
. In conclusion,
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 autonomous transport may lead to some challenges, I believe that
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 benefits outweigh the drawbacks, with proper planning and
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investment
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 technology in order to get all positive
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 with
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are clearly developed and linked logically. Transition words can help improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and provide clearer support for your points.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You provide a clear introduction and conclusion, which is essential in essay writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility solutions
  • commute efficiency
  • occupational displacement
  • ethical quandaries
  • cybersecurity vulnerabilities
  • infrastructure overhaul
  • cultural adaptation
  • sustainability concerns
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