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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.
The two pie charts demonstrate the major sources of
energy
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 utilised by the United States in the 1980s and 1990s specifically.
Overall
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, as evident from the figures, oil was the key source of
energy
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 generation in both time frames.
On the other hand
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, hydroelectric power was the least used.
Firstly
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, oil contributed 42% to
energy
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 production in 1980, which declined by 9% in the following decade. In 1980, the use of natural gas accounted for 26% of the
energy
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 requirements, making it the second-largest source of
energy
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, and it reduced by 1% in the next time period.
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, 22% of coal was employed in the eighties. As far as the nineties are concerned, coal was the second most prominent resource, roughly around 27%.
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, as depicted by the chart, hydroelectric power exhibited the same percentage of 5% in both decades.Conclusively, America made use of 5% of nuclear power for making
energy
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 in the eighties and
finally
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 experienced an increment of 5% in the nineties.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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