The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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This
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line graph Illustrates
the
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information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040. The vertical axis shows the percentages of
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the total
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populations
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population
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while
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the horizontal axis shows the year
overall
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urban population in all four countries show an upward rise throughout the period.
Malaysia
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had the highest rate of urbanization
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Thailand
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the lowest rate of urbanization. In 1970 both
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and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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started from 30% and
Malaysia
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had risen up to 75% in 2020 and
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to rise
further
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up to 85%by 2040. Thailand started with a low percentage around 18% in 1970 and its growth remained slow until 2010. even though
Philippines
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the Philippines
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had risen up to 50% in 1990 it had a gradual decrease up to 2010 and again with a steady increase up to around 58% in 2040.
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the starting percentage of Indonesia is around 12% it has steadily risen until 2040 without going down.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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