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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
The table illustrates the
the
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number of
people
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 from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
Overall
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, we can comprehend that there is an enormous number of
people
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 living outside their country in Europe. In
this
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 sample, the Polish are the group who leads the migration, with over a
million
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people
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 living abroad,
in contrast
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 to the Spanish with only 200.000 and
fraction
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 of them living outside Spain. The
favourites
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 countries for migrant
people
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 are
Britian
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Britain
 and Germany, with over two
million
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 foreigners living in their land. In
Britian
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Britain
 the Polish are the
inmigrants
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immigrants
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 who lead the moving community, with half a
million
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 living there, followed by the Germans with almost 300.000.
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, in
Germany
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 the Italians are the most popular migrants, with 556.000. In stark contrast, Poland is the least favourite country to live
, with
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 only 6000 foreigners living in that region. Followed by Italy that do not reach 200.000 outsiders. Even
tough
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, Italy and Poland have
a
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 enormous difference, they are both far behind on the table compared to Spain, with nearly a
million
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people
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 from other
country
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countries
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 living in its territory.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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