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Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (KLL)

The place of an
airport
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 at present and its future development are visualised
on
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in
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 the plan below.
Overall
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, there are
the
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apply
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two plans which represent Southwest
Airport
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 with
the
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different circumstances. As on the graphs, the various specialities will be added to the
airport
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 in the future. In
favor
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favour
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 of the first argument, the
airport
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 is seen with the
less
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fewer
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 functions now. Individuals can be checked in the check-in area and use
cafe
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the cafe
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 in order to get over their needs
of
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for
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 food and drinks.
Additionally
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, they can use the walkways among the gates.
On the other hand
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, In the improved plan,
the
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many points will be injected
to
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into
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 the
airport
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 in the next year. Apart from the cafe and the check-in, there will be the bag drop which is going to facilitate humans' burdens.
Furthermore
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, in the arrivals
area
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area,
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 there will be new things
such
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 as the ATM,
the
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another
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other
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 cafe and the car hire sector
instead
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 of nothing as now.

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task achievement
Make sure to include a clearer overview of the main changes between the two plans at the start of your essay. This helps to establish context for your reader.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your sentences more smoothly to enhance the flow of your essay. Using linking words can help with this.
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Incorporate more detailed comparisons between the two plans to make your analysis stronger and more specific.
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The essay provides a good basic overview of the changes planned for the airport.
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There are relevant points about both the current airport and the future development that demonstrate understanding of the plans.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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