The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The charts illustrate Japanese and Malaysian average household spending in 2010. The first pie chart depicts that the highest amount of budget spent by the

japanese

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was

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services with 29% spending.

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health

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care

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had the smallest percentage which is only 6%. Meanwhile, people loved to fulfil their daily needs by allocating budget on food, transport, and

houseing

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housing

with similar

proportion

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proportions

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which were 24%, 20%, and 21%. The second pie chart shows the huge amount of money that

Malaysian

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Malaysians

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spent

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houseing

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housing

with 34%.

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, only

few

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a few

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people would allocate their money for

health

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care

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which is half of the

japanese’s

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; 3%.

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, comparing Japan and Malaysia, the

expenditures

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expenditure

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the

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apply

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transport in Malaysia was half less than in Japan, which is 10%.

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, in Japan, the majority of people spent their money on good services

while

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they did the opposite for

health

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care

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On the other hand

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, in Malaysia, the largest proportion of expenditures was in

hourseing

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housing

and the smallest one was in

health

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care

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cultural differences
economic differences
living standards
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government healthcare policies
quality of life
holistic view
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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Social media has completely changed the way family and friends communicate with each other. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

In some countries around the world, men and women are having children late in life. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think all lawbreakers should be sent to prison, while others think there are better alternatives for those whose crimes are minor, such as making them do work for the local community. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?