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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates data about the
population
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 in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total
population
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 in
Australia
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 was higher than
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Malaysia
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in Malaysia
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 in 1980,
while
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 it was lower in 2002. In 1980, the proportion of the male
population
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 in
Malaysia
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 was higher than in
Australia
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 in both years.
However
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, the percentage of the female
population
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 in
Australia
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 was slightly higher than in
Malaysia
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. With regard to the total
population
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 in
Australia
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,
it
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rose from 14.7 million in 1980 to 19.6 million in 2002,
whereas
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Malaysia
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 recorded a significant increase of approximately 10 million in 22 years.
Nevertheless
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, it is interesting to note that the proportions of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in
Australia
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 remained constant at around 50%, but in
Malaysia
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, the male percentage increased slightly to 50.6%, and the percentage of
female
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females
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 declined to 49.4%.
On the other hand
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, it is obvious that the birth rate dropped in both countries.
In contrast
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, the average annual
population
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 growth surged in
Australia
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, yet it declined in
Malaysia
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. Meanwhile, the
population
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 aged over 65 increased in both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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