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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Global water
use
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 is reported by a line chart from 1900 to 2000 and the table shows water consumption in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in the 20th century .
Overall
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, agriculture increased dramatically and reached its peak in 2000.
On the other hand
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, industrial
use
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 and domestic
use
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 have been unchanged from the first year.
According to
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 the line graph, agriculture grew dramatically from around 500 to almost 2000 km3 in 1960 and reached 3000 km3 in 2000. Meanwhile, industrial
use
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 was stable at roughly 2 km3 from 1900 to 1950. By 1960, industrial
use
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 rose dramatically from 2 to above 1000 km3.
Similarly
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, domestic
use
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 was still consistent from the first year at approximately 2 km3 and climbed slightly from 1980 to 2000 at about 500 km3.
In addition
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, the table reports the population in
Brazil
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 was bigger than in
Congo
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, around 176 million.
Therefore
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, the water consumption per person in
Brazil
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 was greater than in
Congo
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, roughly 8 m3. So,
Congo
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 had smaller irrigated land than
Brazil
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, about 100 km2.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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