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the graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a Europan country from 1981 to 2000

the graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a Europan country from 1981 to 2000
The graph provides information about the production
levels
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 of common fuels in a country
of
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 Europe between 1981 and 2000 in terms of three
classification
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classifications
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 namely
Petroleum
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 Coal and Natural
Gas
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.
Overall
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,
while
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 the proportion of natural
gas
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levels
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 increased significantly over the measured period, the reverse was true for
petroleum
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 and coal
levels
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.
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, the biggest rise was observed level in natural
gas
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, albeit starting at a relatively lower rate. Starting at 98 tones in 1981. The proportion of production
levels
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 of
petroleum
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 fuel rose to 130 by 1987. In 2000, around
121tones
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121 tonnes
 of
petroleum
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 level up from 97 in 1992.
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, in 198, the amount of natural
gas
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 started at about 40 and
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 was followed by a rise to 85 in 2000. Despite a noticeable drop from 80 in 1981 to 50 in 1985, the figure for coal
increases
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increased
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 significantly to 75 in 1987. Coal
was
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apply
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experienced a drop
39
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of 39
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 in 2000 and it was
the
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its
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 lowest point in 2000 with 39.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, petroleum, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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