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The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course 'very good'. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course 'very good'. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the outcomes of
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research concerning the proportion of satisfied new
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 of their academic path at a specific university between 2000 and 2010.
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 of module offerings scored poorly in comparison with other analysed aspects, which were viewed positively by the majority over the period. In 2000, print
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resources
 ranked at the highest degree of satisfaction of
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 at 84%, followed by the building/teaching facilities (77%) and teaching quality (77%).
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resources
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 of module offerings recorded
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 that stood at respectively 45% and 32%, less than
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half of the
students
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. Between 2005 and 2010,
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 rank pattern is
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observed
 among all categories. In comparison, satisfaction towards print
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resources
 increased slightly from 84% to 88%
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 to teaching quality that rose
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moderately
 to growth by 4% between 2000 and 2010 and
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 at 69%. Building/teaching facilities remained
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 stable and stood at 77% over the whole period.
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 almost doubled in
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popularity
 over the decade
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steeply
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 from 45% to 88%.
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, the range of modules offered has not ceased to dissatisfy
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 since 2000
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 and has gradually declined since
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 to reach its lowest score in 2010 at 27.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, ressources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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