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Band 1

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they release from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

The statistics show that the majority of criminals undertake crimes right after they
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 from jail. In
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assay
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 a member of
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 having enough support from the government
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 the community. That mostly
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 lucking to give a second chance. As it is quoted in our proverb
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"You better die than have
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 reputation"
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for me
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. The second one is the criminal quotes or ideas that
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 through
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Clarify your introduction and ensure it clearly outlines the points that will be discussed in the essay.
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Develop your ideas more fully, providing explanations and examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Consider rephrasing awkward sentences for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
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The essay addresses an important social issue, which is a good choice for engaging the reader.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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