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The table shows the changes in carbon production in four countries from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the changes in carbon production in four countries from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the various shifts in
carbon
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emission
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emissions
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 across four countries from 1995 to 1999.
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, it is evident that Nigeria produced the most
carbon
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 during the four-year period,
while
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 Algeria produced the least. Meanwhile, Congo was the only country that reduced their
carbon
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 emission stably. Nigeria was the biggest
carbon
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 producer among the four countries, which produced between 2 and 2.3 million
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 per day
thoughout
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throughout
 the four years. The figures fluctuated and started
by
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at
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 2 million
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 in 1995 and ended
with
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at
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 2.3 million
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 in 1999.
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contrary
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, the production in Congo was relatively low, with 270
thousand
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 in the first year. The figures dropped stably around 20
thousand
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 each year to 1998 at 210
thousand
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 and 100
thousand
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 in 1999. In Algeria, there was no production in the first two years until it started producing 40
thousand
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 of
carbon
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 in 1997. The figures dropped to 15
thousand
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 in 1998 before rising to 50
thousand
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 in the
last
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 year. The production in
Bostswanna
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Botswana
 was extremely unstable, with the highest at 210
thousand
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 in 1995 and the lowest at 7
thousand
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 in 1996.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, kilogram, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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