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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
The bar graph illustrates the weekly
hours
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 spent by parents and married individuals doing household chores
such
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 as planting, housework, and childcare.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 married females spend more
hours
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 in every category compared to males.
However
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, couples who have 1 or 2 kids and those who have more than 3 children spend longer time in household activities.
According to
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 the data, about 30
hours
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 per week are spent doing housework by married women with no child
whereas
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 men of the same group allocate less than 20
hours
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 (17).
Moreover
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, parents with a single child or 2 children spend longer duration in domestic work where mothers accounted for spending more than 50
hours
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 and fathers usually spend
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 similar time as men who do not have kids.
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, in families with more than three kids, women spent around 55
hours
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 per week
while
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 the number of
hours
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 spent by men decreased.
Lastly
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, fathers with more than 3 youngsters allocated only 15
hours
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 helping in domestic activities.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • demographics
  • household responsibilities
  • societal expectations
  • norms
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • contributions
  • family structure
  • cultural implications
  • social implications
  • work-life balance
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