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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisonswhererelevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisonswhererelevant.
The diagram illustrates the process for recycling
plastic
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 bottles,
wich
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which
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it
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apply
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is divided
in
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into
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 nine steps.
Overall
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, if the conditions are
fullfilled
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fulfilled
, we can see that the goal of
this
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 process is to
use
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 the same
plastic
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 over and over again. To get a clear view of the way that
the
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apply
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people can
use
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 material more than once, I am going to explain each step one by one.
To begin
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 with, to recycle used
plastic
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, people need to put it into recycling bins.
Then
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 a specialized truck
pick
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picks
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 it up to transport the products to the company
that
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apply
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gives
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giving
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 a new life to
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this
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these
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 materials. In the
work place
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workplace
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, the first method that they
use
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 is to sort them by type.
Then
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, when it is already sorted, they compress them to form
block
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a block
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. After they shape it, they crush
them
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it
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 to reduce it into small pieces. Once the small pieces are washed, the workers put them in a machine to produce
plastic
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 pellets. The next step
it
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is
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 to heat those pellets to form the raw material. And,
to conclude
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 their job, they
use
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this
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 raw material to make new products with the, now
recicled
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recycled
,
plastic
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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