Is teaching people aged 65 or above to use computers a good way to use government money, or is it a waste of time and resources? Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Task Achievement
Your essay presents relevant ideas, but be sure to develop these points more thoroughly. For example, explain how technology helps older adults maintain social connections in more detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
Look into improving the organization of your essay. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure a logical flow of ideas from one sentence to the next.
Coherence and Cohesion
There are several spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'useing' should be 'using', 'authourty' should be 'authority'). Make sure to proofread for such mistakes.
Task Achievement
The essay successfully presents both points of view regarding the allocation of government resources, which is essential for task fulfillment.
Task Achievement
Your ideas on the impact of computer education on older adults' mental health are insightful and underscore the importance of community connection.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer literacy
  • digital divide
  • quality of life
  • digital economy
  • rural or isolated communities
  • equality of access
  • cost-benefit analysis
  • cognitive ability
  • technological advancement
  • government funding
  • resource allocation
  • critical areas
  • return on investment
  • engage socially
  • access information
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