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Band 4

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, consumers in various countries have had access to food produced across the world in local
supermarckets
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supermarkets
. In my opinion, I believe that the phenomenon is both positive and negative. On the one hand, one primary positive impact is the variety of food choices globalized locals'
view point
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viewpoint
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. To be specific, consumers nowadays have access to exotic cuisines previously unavailable or rare, and after encountering different
flavors
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, it enriches their
overall
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 cultural experiences and
boarden
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broaden
 their
horizens
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horizons
.
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, in Taiwan, people now can easily obtain Swiss cheese or fresh blueberries from South
American
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America
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 without the
needs
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need
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for taking
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to take
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 a long-haul flight. Eventually, the
conveniency
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convenience
 allows individuals to enjoy the different tastes among various continents and make their
life
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lives
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 entertaining.
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, the delivery process of
foods
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 around the globe is detrimental to
natural
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 environment. Notably,
foods
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 which travel across the sea usually have higher carbon
food
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foot
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 prints, and that means the way that these
foods
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 are transported leads to larger carbon emissions.
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, the transportation of a single bag of
tomatos
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tomatoes
 from Europe to Asia usually
produce
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produces
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 tons of
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases because of
a
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 huge amount of consumption
in
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of
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 fossil fuel by planes. Ultimately, the whole delivery process triggers global warming, air pollution, and
damges
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damage
on
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to
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the environments
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environments
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environment
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. In conclusion, I believe that simple access to foreign
foods
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 can have both positive and negative influences
to
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on
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 human society, as it forms globalization, but simultaneously contributes to environmental degradation and climate change.

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language use
Consider reviewing the spelling of 'supermarket' and 'tomatoes' to enhance your writing precision. Also, be cautious with plural forms like 'horizons' instead of 'horizens'.
task response
When you state the impact on the environment, it would be beneficial to make a clearer connection to how this directly affects consumers or societies overall. Expanding on that link can strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You effectively presented both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay maintains a logical flow, with clear paragraphs that distinctly address different points of view.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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