The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The two charts indicate the location of
dance
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classes
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and the number of
students
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attends in
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attending
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three kinds of
dance
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classes
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in a city in Australia.
In
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Overall
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overall
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, it is evident that
popular
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the popular
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place
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places
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of
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for
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dance
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classes
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is
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are
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private studios.
while
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,
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apply
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college-base studios
is
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have
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the
least
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lowest
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reputation in all locations.
In addition
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, the
most
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largest
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number of
students
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at age
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aged
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under 11
is attending in
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attend
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Ballet. By looking at the graph, it seems to be that under just fifty
percent
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per cent
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of
students
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choose the private studio, after that approximately one- quarter like to select school halls.
Regarding the
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The
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number of
students
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who sign up is decreasing
about
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by
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around 18
percent
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per cent
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. Moving to the
another
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other
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graph, there are three kinds of
dance
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classes
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. More than 500
Students
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aged 11-16 like modern
dance
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. Tap
dance
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is in
the
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apply
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second place a little more than 400
students
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. the
last
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one is ballet about 300 individuals.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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