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The table illustrates the expense of the consumer on various items in five countries (Ireland, Turkey, Italy, Spain and Sweden) in the year of 2002.

The table illustrates the expense of the consumer on various items in five countries (Ireland, Turkey, Italy, Spain and Sweden) in the year of 2002.
The table compares the number of male and female workers as
wel
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well
 as factories which
was
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produced silk in two different
region
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regions
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 : Wales and England per ten
year
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years
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 from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
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,
I
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it
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 can be clearly seen that the
amount
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number
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 of factories
was risen
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rose
has risen
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 significantly with some fluctuations
while
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 the number of employees
was
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apply
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decreased considerably. As the table shows, in 1851,

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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