The pie charts show student enrollments in different courses in 1984, 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show student enrollments in different courses in 1984, 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show student enrollments in different courses in 1984, 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare
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enrollments
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in different
courses
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in the years 1984, 1994, and 2004. The data is measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that online
courses
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were not
availible
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available
in 1984 but
it
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they
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appeared later in 1994. Meanwhile, face-to-face
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courses
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course
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enrollments
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decreased gradually over the years.
In contrast
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, mixed media
attendence
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attendance
witnessed
more
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a more
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than twofold rise by the year 2004.
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, the number of
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cores
dance
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courses
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enrollers remained nearly the same. In 1984 mixed media
courses
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enrollments
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enrollment
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were
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13%, and the number showed no change in 1994;
however
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, in 2004, it surged to more than one-third of the total
enrollments
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. Online media
courses
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started only in 1994 with 11% of students
attendence
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attendance
and the numbers had a slight decrease by 2004, becoming 10%.
On the other hand
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, student
enrollmentenrollments
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enrollment enrollment
in traditional
courses
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was more than two-thirds of the total enrollment;
nevertheless
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, the numbers kept falling until
it
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they
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reached less than
a
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apply
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half in 2004.
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, correspondence
courses
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accounted for 20% of
students
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student
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enrollments
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in the years 1984 and 1994 but it experienced a decline
by
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of
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5%, reaching 15% in 2004.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words enrollments, courses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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