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During a recent journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. you talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible join in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter - Remind him when and where you met - Tell him what kind of job you are interested in - Say why you think you would be suitable for the job.

Dear Sir, I am writing with regard to the recent interaction we had on
flight
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 from Bengaluru to Delhi on March 15,
2025
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2025,
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 and you presented me
an
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 opportunity to
possibily
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possibly
 work for one of your restaurants. Hope you remember me from your recent business trip on March 15. I was seated next to you after my change in seat
due to
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 some technical issues. I happen to share my
intrest
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interest
 in cooking and being a chef. I was coming back to my hometown after completing my hotel management study. It was amazing to find out that you own a chain of restaurants and as I said earlier I have
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intrest
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interest
to be
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in being
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 a chef and
serve
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customer
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customers
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 with the amazing dishes I make. I can work under tough timelines and easily serve multiple people at once using my
multi tasking
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 skills. I think I can contribute not only
in
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kitchen
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the kitchen
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 but
also
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 can take
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when ever
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whenever
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 a place is
bit
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a bit
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 busy, as
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 was part of my studies and can handle tough customers with easy
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using
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 my
softskills
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soft skills
. I think I am
good
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a good
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 fit for your restaurant. I look forward
for
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 your consideration. Yours faithfully, Narender Singh

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single main idea, and try to avoid combining multiple ideas in one paragraph.
task achievement
Work on refining your grammar and spelling; some small inaccuracies can distract the reader from your main points.
task achievement
You clearly stated the context of your meeting and your interest in the job, which is essential for a good task response.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing statement expresses eagerness, which leaves a positive impression on the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • businessman
  • job role
  • suitable
  • experience
  • skills
  • customer service
  • enthusiasm
  • motivation
  • culinary training
  • meet
  • contact
  • discuss
  • team
  • contribute
  • positive impact
  • eager
  • willingness
  • food industry
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