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Band 4.5

Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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 modern era, exporting and importing goods
around
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all over the world
is
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has been
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 increasing rapidly over
past
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the past
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 years.
Food
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 should be produced only for
population
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the population
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 of
Countries
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 and should be imported
little
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as little
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 amount of
food
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 as possible. I agree with
trend
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the trend
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 but
upto
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up to
 some extent and will discuss
following
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the following
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.
To begin
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 with,
by
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apply
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growing
eatble
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eatable
stable
products
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 only for
population
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the population
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 of
own
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your own
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 country can give several
advatages
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advantages
 to people.
Countrie's
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Countries
 growth can be enhanced through
this
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 system. To elaborate, by importing the
products
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 price of
products
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get
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gets
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 automatically higher and
this
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 is a negative development.
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causes
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apply
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affect
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affects
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on middle- class
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middle-class
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 and poor people because they face problems purchasing
food
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. It makes
there
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their
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 life tougher as they
spent
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spend
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 their all money on
food
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.
For example
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, if wheat is being imported to different nations
it's
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its
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 price is higher than regular prices which makes
huge
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a huge
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 difference.
Moreover
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, land can be used for other purposes rather than growing crops in large areas. Hospitals ,
schools
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and schools
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 can be built for future development.
However
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, many
countries
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doesn't
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don't
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 have proper weather and suitable soil to grow vegetables and fruits. In detail, they get all the important goods from other
countries
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 if
countrie's
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countries
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 will not help others they can face trouble in future. Because every place in
world
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the world
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 is running
business
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a business
the business
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 with export
amd
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and
 import method only
few
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a few
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 produce all the
products
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 in their own places.
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, in Canada winters are very harsh it is impossible to grow vegetables. They have only option to
buying
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buy
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 them from
another suppliers
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another supplier
other suppliers
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. So, for survival in difficult places getting
food
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 from
another suppliers
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another supplier
other suppliers
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 is
important
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an important
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 factor. In conclusion, to
improving
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improve
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growth
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the growth
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 of
economy
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the economy
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countries
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 should produce
food
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 only for their own people.
Whereas
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othet
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other
 views can not be neglected as many
countries
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 are dependent on others because of difficult survival.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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