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Band 3

In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this satetement?

Most of the time,technological advancements,
has
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 been beneficial to humans.
Internet
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The Internet
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 is one of
that
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 advantages which made a human's life easier in numerous ways.Some people argue that
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it's
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 resourceful nature it raised a concern about the extinction of newspapers and
books
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 because people can start reading online free of cost.In
this
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 essay,
i
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 will elaborate
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this
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 point with supportive examples before providing my opinion. To commence with,
human
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the human
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 mind
become
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 eager to consume news about the events happening
in
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all around the world.Newspapers were used to sustain that purpose until the invention of online blogs.It is almost effortless to read on devices
such
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 as tablets,
mobile-phones
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mobile phones
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 and computers rather than go out,
buying
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buy
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 a newspaper and
then
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 read it.
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,educated citizens
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 not prefer to utilize paper products
due to
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 environmental concerns.
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to
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,
reguler
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regular
books
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replaced
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 by e-
books
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.
As a result
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,the waiting time
of
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for
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 delivery is eliminated completely and
aslo
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also
,a consumer can read
books
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 on their devices at any time without carrying anything extra.
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this
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,the cost of e-
books
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 seems like peanuts
as
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 comparison to the cost of actual
books
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. In my opinion,newspapers will
be entirely banish
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 in the future but on the
other-hand
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other hand
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, there will always be a group of
persons
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people
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 who like to read
on
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paper based
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books
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,
therefore
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 it looks extremely impossible that
book makers
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bookmakers
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 will stop
the
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production.

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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your thesis statement in the introduction. Clearly state your opinion regarding the future of printed newspapers and books.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and add linking words to improve flow between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Use correct spelling and grammar consistently, especially focusing on word forms and punctuation to enhance readability.
task achievement
You presented a relevant argument about the advantages of digital reading which is a pertinent point in the discussion.
task achievement
Your essay reflects an understanding of the topic, and you provide a variety of examples to support your claim.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digitalization
  • online sources
  • convenience
  • cost savings
  • environmental benefits
  • tactile experience
  • distractions
  • collectibility
  • digital divide
  • economic limitations
  • infrastructural limitations
  • digital fatigue
  • prolonged exposure
  • psychological impact
  • educational impact
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • printed media
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