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In the past, buildings ofien reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar.What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?

Presently, there
were
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 a
lot
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 of modern
buildings
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 now turn to look
alike
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 part of
the
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cities
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 worldwide.
This
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meaning
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 that the traditional
buildings
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 are no longer in the
cities
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. Maybe only one or two old-fashioned were still exist.
People
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 now were
use
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 to
live
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living
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lin
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in
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 modern
buildings
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 like apartments,
villa
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villas
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, or
a
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apply
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mansion
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mansions
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 now, because the world is developing
from
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each year. Right now, the
generation
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was
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also
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change
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changed
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 a
lot
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. The
cities
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, the culture, and a
lot
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 of changes
of
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in
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 society too. For
the
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this
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 reason
that
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,
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 humans would change
type
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the type
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 of houses
,
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 so that
it
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they
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 would fit with the
generation
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 now. Not just about the
generation
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, but
also
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 because of the safety. In the past,
people
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 were used to all
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 in one kind of accommodation, even thou
the
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 storm
can
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 come
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at anytime
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anytime
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a time
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, but
in
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at
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 that
time
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 the world didn't have
provided
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a
lot
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 of methods to upgrade a new type of accommodation, and that period of
time
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, no one has yet
ionvented
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invented
 better materials to build a more modern style of
house
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. The young
generation
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 now
like
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likes
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 modern and stylish
buildings
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 more than the old
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time
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times
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, so
cities
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 are built to match their century. Young
people
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 care about technology, so structures are made modern to fit their lifestyle.
People
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 today
is
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 less interested in
old
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time
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buildings
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. They prefer new, modern styles, so old
buildings
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 are
not
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 longer exist.
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,
this
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 could be a good thing, because modern
building
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buildings
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 are safer ,
use
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and use
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 better materials . save energy, and match the lifestyle of
people
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 today.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the clarity and organization of your ideas by structuring your paragraphs more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction provides a clear overview of the points you will discuss, and make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes your perspectives on the topic.
Task Achievement
You’ve identified important reasons for the shift in building styles, such as safety and modern preferences.
Task Achievement
Your essay reflects the current global trend of architectural uniformity, which is relevant to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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