The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The graph above illustrates the
amount
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number
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of participants
for
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in
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different activities at a social centre in
Melbounrne
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Melbourne
in the
period
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of 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the activity of
film
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the film
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club reached
the
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a
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notable figure compared to other activities
as well as
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the
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a
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significantly
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increase
of
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in
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table tennis
at the end
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of the
period
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. As for table tennis activity, it
initially
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started at just 16 members in 2000,
however
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, the figure grew up constantly and
peak
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peaked
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at 52 participants in 2020.
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, the number of
participant
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participants
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for amateur dramatics went down remarkably from 2005 to 2020,
although
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it had a slight rise in the first 5 years. When it comes to martial arts and musical performance, we can see the unusual of the figures.
First,
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the
member
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members
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participated
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who participated
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in martial arts had
its
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a
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slight fluctuation throughout the whole
period
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but it returned to the same as initial figures.
Moreover
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, the musical performance had
the
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a
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later appearance in comparison with other activities but always increased in the entire
period
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and got 16 members. Eventually, there
had
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was
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a fluctuation in the number of participants for
Film
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the Film
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club
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Club
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from 2000 to 2020 when it reached
at
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apply
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64
participant
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participants
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at first and
got
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apply
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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increase
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increased
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for
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to
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66 members in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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