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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts compare how much
time
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 learners spent studying per day at five different universities.
Overall
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,
while
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University
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 C spent the most
time
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 on
weekdays
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,
university
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 A shows the least difference between weekday and weekend
hours
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,
whereas
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 most universities show a drop in
hours
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 from
weekdays
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 to
weekends
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. It is
also
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 clear that the largest drop was at
University
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 D. Focusing on universities that are more popular among students, they spend 10.6
hours
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 on
weekdays
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, considerably more than the amount of
time
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 spent on
weekends
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 (7.8). When it comes to
University
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 B, learners allocated 10.1
hours
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 on
weekdays
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, which is slightly higher than on
weekends
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 (8.6). The figure for
University
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 E was
also
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 higher, with 10
hours
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 on
weekdays
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 rather than on
weekends
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, showing much less with 6.2
hours
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. As for the remaining data,
university
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 A showed the longest
time
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 on
weekends
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, with 9
hours
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,
while
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 the difference between
weekdays
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 and
weekends
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 is 0.8
hours
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. The disparity was
also
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 pronounced at
University
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 D, with respective figures standing at 9.6
hours
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 and 5.6
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, university, weekdays, hours, weekends with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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