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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?(Anelya1)

Some people have the chance to vent their complaints publicly because social media has made it easier for them.
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 consequence of
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 benefit is that people can publicly discuss problems and frustrations.
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 of the primary consequences of easily expressing
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bad emotions,
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 is frustration, is promoting pessimism and negativity.
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toxic behaviour.
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 many time unpleasant opinions about individuals, a person can feel dissatisfaction in the future.
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 of behaviour estimated that many individuals, who are fostering negative sentiments, in 90% can have displeasure
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 profit of discussion publicly. To be more precise,
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 about their disadvantages, and
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 that reason company employees can improve the quality of products and develop new
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 help the discontent viewers. For
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 it seems that they have improvements from 30% to 70% sales per year with the help of individuals who expressed their disapproval. In conclusion, expressing complaints can lead to the
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 spread of negativity, but it
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 provides the benefit of allowing public discussion of important issues.

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Consider providing more detailed explanations and justifications for each point you make to strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to improve coherence. Ensure that each idea connects smoothly to the next.
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Make sure to elaborate on examples provided to give more context and depth to your arguments, helping the reader understand your point better.
structural organization
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
content development
You have identified both the negative and positive aspects of social media as a platform for expression, showcasing balanced thinking.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vent
  • frustrations
  • complaints
  • publicly
  • accountability
  • service
  • rectify
  • mental health
  • negativity
  • anxiety
  • social movements
  • galvanize
  • awareness
  • reform
  • misuse
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • polarization
  • discourse
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