The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

it's
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crystal clear that
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apply
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Australia,
USA
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the USA
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and Finland
are
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have
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experienced
increase
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an increase
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in
given
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the given
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years,
while
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Japan has
decrease
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decreased
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