The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

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It is clearly seen that
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all countries went up in proportion, with the
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of Japan
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remains more or less the same.The highest proportion belongs to
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the USA
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over the period
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the least is
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Japan
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, Japan had a stable rise over the period

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