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Some people think the typical teaching of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. Do you agree or disagree?

The best way to teach
students
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 is in the classroom, which helps in clearing the doubts of pupils and questioning them. But,
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 the growth in online teaching during the pandemic, one of the main reasons that might be the cause, I think that classes will not exist by the year 2025. Nowadays, not all
students
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 don't want to go to school because of the online classes. Before, the
students
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 were excited to go to school to meet their friends and share their lunch boxes, and
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 that helped them to clear their doubts by asking
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teacher
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 directly or their friends.
Due to
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 the pandemic, schools were closed for safety reasons, and children started to attend online lectures, which helps schools earn more by not paying any electricity bills and maintaining the property.
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, parents
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 started supporting
this
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 culture of online teaching because of the safety of their
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, and they get more time to spend with them
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learning at home. Another reason that will affect the class
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is the increasing trend of using Artificial Intelligence, which gives all the answers that humans are not able to solve, and
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 makes
easier
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 and faster way with one click.
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,
students
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 sometimes ask weird questions that teachers are not able to answer at
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but AI can, which
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 affects the typical relationship between them.
To sum up
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, there are multiple reasons that will affect the class not
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exist by the year 2025
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 and
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 cause the reason to be the typical teaching way that was before.

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task achievement
Clarify your stance in the introduction. Consider stating it more explicitly at the beginning so the reader understands your position right away.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that sentences are structured clearly. For example, ‘not all students don’t want to go to school’ is contradictory. Instead, say ‘some students prefer online classes’ to avoid confusion.
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Add more examples to support your points. For instance, provide specific examples of how AI impacts learning and give details on how online classes have changed student interactions to strengthen your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas. Use linking phrases to connect thoughts, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
content
The essay introduces relevant points about online learning and the impact of AI, which are significant trends in education.
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The conclusion summarizes the main points effectively and reinforces the argument presented in the essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resilient
  • adaptive
  • engagement
  • personalized learning
  • structure
  • social development
  • technological advancements
  • virtual reality
  • artificial intelligence
  • online learning platforms
  • flexible
  • accessible
  • remote learning
  • permanent shift
  • blended learning models
  • in-person instruction
  • digital resources
  • learning preferences
  • developing countries
  • digital transformation
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