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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the figure given illustrates the
development
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 of the Chorleywood
village
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, which was located near London, since the middle of the 19th century. Based on an
overall
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 perspective,
this
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village
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 was contained in nine sections.
Furthermore
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, It can be seen that the highest
development
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 was in 1970 to 1994.
On the other hand
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, the lowest
development
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 was in 1868 to 1883. From an initial figure, the main road was built from the beginning. It was built from the north to the south of the
village
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, and the west to the earth of the area.
Then
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, the following road constructions were a railway in 1909 and a motorway in 1970, respectively.
Moreover
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, the first
development
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 was from 1868 to 1883, which was located in the centre of the
village
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. The second
development
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 was in 1883-1992, which was located in the south of the
village
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, particularly the Charley station. The next
development
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 was in 1922-1970, which was placed in the southwest and the south of the
village
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. The spot, which was built in 1970-1994, was located in the five sections of the
village
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, especially in the middle and east areas of the
village
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.
To sum up
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, at the beginning of 1868, the developments were only the main road and a small area in the middle of the
village
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. As time went by, the
development
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 was enhanced in the following years, including the reconstruction of a motorway and a railway.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words development, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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