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Band 3

The plans below show the layout of a public library now, and how it will look after development.

Presented for observation are two floorplans highlighting the renovations which are expected to take place at a public
library
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. From an
overall
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 perspective, noticeable changes have been made to enlarge the
library
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, create and
arrage
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arrange
 some facilities.
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, it is considered to build a new
kid
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's area which includes
computer
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a computer
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 room in the
library
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. Initiating with the present
library
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that is
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in
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on
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 the west side of the future map,
although
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 the new
library
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 will be larger in size than the old one, it is going to be shrunk in order to make space for new
kid
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's facilities.
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, a fantasy bookshelf will be between
male
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the male
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 and female
restroom
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restrooms
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. Some
kid
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's bookshelves are
also
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 set to be in the nearby room. Moving onto the east side of the
library
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 after being developed, there is a new place for children which includes some books for students, seating,
store
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a store
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 and
staffroom
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a staffroom
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.
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, the computer room is planned to be constructed in the southeast part. There are
also
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 new entrances for
staffroom
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the staffroom
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 and
kid
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's area.

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Task Achievement
Include a clearer introduction that outlines the main changes and improvements in the library renovation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes the key points discussed in your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the logical structure of your essay.
Task Achievement
You provided a good overview of the renovations and the changes to the library layout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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