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Poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it is difficult to get access to the university education, so some people think universities should make it easier for them to study at. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Students
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 who come from a low-income background often struggle to be accepted to an undergraduate program. And some think
universities
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 should make the process easier for disadvantaged pupils. I agree with that statement and steps should be taken to achieve that. There are several reasons why it is hard for these
students
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 to access
this
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 type of education.
Firstly
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, Living far away from the establishments since they live in rural areas and most
universities
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 are located in major cities,
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, Harvard University is in Boston. And it is pretty expensive for a young adult to move without financial support, let alone rent a dorm to stay in till the end of their education.
Secondly
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, Most
universities
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 demand tuition fees each semester in order to study and have a bachelor's degree there. I believe that the process of accepting
students
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 should be reconsidered by implementing new admission guidelines and giving
scholarship
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scholarships
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 to the ones in need with higher scores
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 of just the
high scores
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high-scoring
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students
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.
Also
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, Providing a special program where
students
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 can work and study at the same time to maintain their lifestyle without struggling through their careers. Like, giving the pupils a part-time job at the university so they can gain both money and skills that could benefit from in terms of work ethic. In conclusion, I agree that
universities
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 should make it easier for
students
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 to have an education without struggling with extra debt. And by helping them they give hope to the people to continue with their vision in life.

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance logical connectors and transition phrases between sentences and paragraphs for a smoother flow.
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Ensure that every argument is clearly fleshed out with examples and detailed explanations.
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Address minor grammatical errors to improve clarity.
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The introduction provides a clear stance on the issue and outlines the main points.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the key arguments and reinforces the viewpoint.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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