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Many people feel that media coverage has become increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

Nowadays, many people
believes
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 that
media
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 coverage has become Increasingly unfair in
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 decade.I can explain all the points and suggest
the
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 solution to fix the problems
occurred
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 by journalists. First of all,the News channel always
want
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 to cover
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 a story which contains all spices and get more viewers.
EvenThough
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, they try to publish some extended stories by adding their own words in front of
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 to
make believe
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 on publishers .
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 all happens just because Our Citizens support them and motivate them
for launching
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 all
kind
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 of news without getting offended.
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,
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media
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the media
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 try to announce their story in every path to get appreciation
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 as Radio,Television,and Social
media
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 until they
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achieve their goal
to
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make
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getting
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 thousands of views ,
where as
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,
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The
Journalist
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Journalists
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 never try to convey any messages in a straight forward form they always edit all the stories and pass to the public without thinking of any outcomes from the public's.
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,to fix the problems people should try to avoid
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media
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the media
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 and cover their own
story
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stories
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 by themselves and pass
to
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them to
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 the public through
your
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their
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 family ,friends and the
person
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people
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 who
is
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 near
to
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You
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Them
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.
Like wise
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 the old decades tried to convey their messages
either
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whether
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 it's
a
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good news or
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bad through post
card
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 and
then
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 Trunk calls.

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Include more specific examples to support your arguments and enhance the clarity of your ideas.
language accuracy
Make sure to proofread your essay to correct small language inaccuracies, such as verb agreement and punctuation.
task achievement
You have highlighted important issues regarding media biased coverage and provided a potential solution, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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